Thesis statement

So I'm supposed to post my thesis statement for the Rhetorical Analysis (just FYI I had to use spell check on both of those words), so here goes.

NOTE: this is just a first draft of my thesis statement and this therefore subject to change without prior notice.

Reid Smith, the author of "The Top Ten Greatest Threats to American Security" does not effectively convince the American public that the countries he lists pose an immediate threat to America because though he tries to incite fear he come across almost as a paranoid conspiracy theorist, the language he uses is far to flashy for his audience, and he does not give any backing for many of the incredible claims he makes.

Cheers!